and thank you for ur suggestion

weight of the moment most definitely

This poem is raw and emotional, with strong imagery and a relatable theme of hidden pain. Lines like “Is it really love if it makes you weep?” strike deep. The use of metaphor is powerful, and the emotion feels very real. It could benefit from a closing line of hope—or is the point to sit in that pain?

Do you want readers to feel the weight of the moment, or are you hinting at a light to come?