The way you write Lena's voice - precise, controlled, almost clinical - and then gradually let the cracks show through small details like Adrian remembering her coffee order and her realizing she knew how he held paper documents, is so beautifully paced. The line "he just showed up, consistently, attentively, honestly, and waited to see if I would meet him" captures exactly what makes this kind of love feel earned rather than rushed.
well I have some different thoughts in my mind that I want to share with you, can I share them with you on other social media platforms
We can shift to social media platforms to talk more easily about this.
Here are my all other platforms:  Twitter: WinterKatie3  Insta: winterkatie687  Email: [email protected]  Discord: winterkatie

Loved your story! The world and characters are easy to imagine, which is why I think it would translate beautifully into a manga or webtoon. It could be a great way to attract more readers. 
I'm a commission-based artist with experience creating manga/webtoon artwork and related projects. I’ve worked on similar pieces before, and I’d be happy to share my portfolio if you're interested. reach out at:akiracomicart2@[email protected] if interested.

Hey,
I recently found your story and I really enjoyed reading it. The way you write makes the scenes easy to imagine, almost like watching them unfold visually. Because of that, I feel like your story would translate really well into a webtoon or comic format.
I’m a commissioned comic artist, and I’d love the chance to create visual scenes based on your story if you’d ever be interested in that. No pressure at all, I just thought it could be a fun and creative collaboration.
If you'd like to talk more about it sometime, you can reach me on Insta gram (luna art soul).
Best regards,Luna

There’s something about the way this flows that makes it feel more experienced than most early drafts I come across.

You have such a beautiful way with storytelling. I thought of some interesting concepts for your story. Wanna hear?